For the final print crit we were split into 2 groups , group A went away while group B set up there work and we looked at it. Then vice versa.
I laid all of my work out which consisted off a printed mock up of my first publication design booklet for the letter P for preparation , examples of embossing , foiling and laser cut to show my experimentation. I also left out a mock up of my paper size and my belly band.
Questions i asked:
- Do i have enough content?
- Does my stock and colour work?
- Do the columns work on the pages?
Feedback i received:
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- You have plenty of content but the way its laid out makes it look quite empty? For example i think the 'P For preparation' seem a little small and the columns float in the middle of the page if you maybe made the columns left/right aligned then added some decor to fill the space.
- Love fluorescent stock - bright white stock goes with this best. If you are going to use foiling. Try the bronze/cooper/black ones as opposed to gold. Black foil on cover will look lush.
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- Form the initial book i think that there is enough content to work with . Possibly include a contents page so your audience can navigate to certain sections.The info graphics are really clean and easy to identify.
- The off white against the fluorescent belly band works really well. I would suggest for your other books to possibly use some other colours. The black foiled numbers on the from is a excellent way of telling your audience what order to read your books.Look at Patrick Frys - No Zine. for inspiration.
Additional comments from all the people who crit my work :
- Not sure about the body copy font. Good title font but maybe use on without slanted 'A's' for body copy
- Maybe for front cover design make title letter more prominent
- Maybe you could centre cover design to make better use of space.
- Such a clever concept make sure to keep it minimal and consistent throughout the word print.
- Maybe try a different font for the body copy. The angle on some of the letters breaks the flow when reading.For Example the W. The tracking kerning needs adjusting un-even spaces between words.
- Keep it simple , it works.
- Would understand how the layout would work when the images ect are in the right place.
- Consider body copy font for legibility
- P is for Prep - Experiment with cover
- A lot of experiments with different print process shows a lot of research.
After my crit the main thing i took from my comments was to change my typeface as some of the lettering was slanted. Also after speaking to lorraine who also agreed its legible but not that readable.So i decided to change my typeface after everyone agreeing on the same point it seemed important to change that aspect.
My original typeface:
New typeface:
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